The Copy.

I began writing my version of the copy after the layout was produced and decided as a group.
My first draft was on the charity work of sending shoe boxes to the soldiers abroad for Christmas.

Samuel Ward contributes to charity.

'Samuel Ward have always been an involved school when it comes to charity but this year they have been exceptionally thoughtful when they sent a number of shoe boxes to the British troops fighting in Afghanistan for Christmas.

Headmaster Howard Lay explained why it was so important to make this gesture. “I know how important it is to help others, I want to open the students eyes and show them that Christmas isn’t about receiving presents but making the effort to help others have a good day. After all, these soldiers are fighting for us, the least we can do is spend them some homely gifts. We filled the boxes with basic objects that many of us take for granted, for example, tomato ketchup sachets.”

“Within each box we sent a letter to each soldier, which I found was very important, there are many students who are interested in finding out about the army and by doing this we are giving them a great opportunity to do so.”'

After reading through this and comparing it to other articles in the Haverhill Echo and Haverhill Weekly news and I did not think it was good enough for the Haverhill Gazette, the wording was not right as it was too descriptive and the column inches were to large so instead of tweaking it I decided to start from scratch and re-wite the article.

I decided to change the charity as there are many people who contribute to sending shoe boxes to the soldiers and do not get any recognition so I went with a local charity - Haverhill's cancer hospice. 

Samuel ward contributes to charity

'Samuel Ward Academy has been celebrating after raising a whopping £6,476 for a local breast cancer hospice.

The Academy started fund raising for the hospice this year by holding a variety of events. Non-uniform days, bake sales, car washing and a sponsored fun run have all helped raise the phenomenal sum.

Headmaster Howard Lay, said: “I love to get the pupils involved in helping others and by fund raising we are able to teach the pupils that even a small contribution of your time and effort can make a big difference.”

With the in-school events being successful Howard Lay wanted to contribute more. The Academy then went on to raise more money by cooking a variety of cakes: including muffins, cookies and brownies and selling them on Haverhill High Street during the weekend.

A lead ambassador of Samuel Ward Academy, Amber Benjamin 18, found the whole experience thrilling. She exclaimed: “I couldn’t believe how well it went, the whole school wanted to get involved and with everybody’s effort we were able to raise as much as we did.”

Breast Cancer Hospice chairman Daniel Wright, was astonished to receive £6,476 cheque from Samuel Ward Academy.'

I found this article a lot more suitable for the Haverhill Gazette. The article included a local school helping out a local charity. The wording was also more to the point and therefore better for a local newspaper.